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Oh Kyo.
Always so serene
it seems.
That Chaos inside
still resides.
Still forming in your mind.

"Why do you stand over a grave,
with such feelings of regret?"
The way you save
your emotions from her since the day you met.
The cure for chaos is in her ways
that single flower blooming
amidst these tormenting days
beside you though you're assuming
she loves him more.
But is this the feeling
that brings you to the floor?
Are you the boy
she's been looking for?
You stand out in this place
not because of your hair
but because your love has a face.
You think of all the things you lack
But I think you'll find it's stuck on your back.

Are you to hide from her
forever, your true form?
Do you think your love is
something to be worn.
when she forgets,
will she recognise you?
Will you have regrets?
Don't act like she never knew.

Like a cat
you'll hide alone.
Wondering what becomes of snow
And when spring starts.
You'll watch her bloom,
Like the flower of your undeveloped heart.
This is just something random about Kyo. The girl I keep mentioning is Tohru.
Just some random fanfiction
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:iconnatnat12998:
NatNat12998 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
So. BEAUTIFUL!Lovely Shoujo (Pretty Please) [V3] 
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gottaluvkyo Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw. This is so cute!!!
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:icondisturbedchicken:
disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thank you x
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gottaluvkyo Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem!
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LumpkinZ Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2009  Student Digital Artist
Kyaaa!!! So sweet! Here's an Inuyasha one. :onfire:

Both have black hair.
One has an evil stare.
One has loose socks....
I LOVE PORKCHOPS!!
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:icondisturbedchicken:
disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2009  Student Digital Artist
:XD: It DOES kinda look like Inuyasha lol
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:iconlumpkinz:
LumpkinZ Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2009  Student Digital Artist
Yes, yes it does. I'm so proud!
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:icondisturbedchicken:
disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2009  Student Digital Artist
You need to find a real Inuyasha one! :D someone has to make one lol
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LumpkinZ Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2009  Student Digital Artist
Hmmm, I suppose I do.
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:icondisturbedchicken:
disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2009  Student Digital Artist
Oh it's your responsibility now :D
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:iconlumpkinz:
LumpkinZ Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2009  Student Digital Artist
Ew, responsibility.
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:icondisturbedchicken:
disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2009  Student Digital Artist
Okay I'll be nice *takes the responsibility away and locks it in a box*
All better?
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102obsessions Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2008
awww i love poor kyo he is mine!!!!
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:icondisturbedchicken:
disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2008  Student Digital Artist
^^ mine too lol
i want him and tohru to be together!!!! :heart:
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102obsessions Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2008
umm i dont want him and tohru together he is too hot to be with her she should get yuki and i should get kyo :) he-he lolz no really if he was real i would make friends with him then ask him out he....is.........hot!!! so yeah... :) lolz
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2008  Student Digital Artist
oh yeah lol if he were real lol
but in the story its him and tohru for definate :heart:
cause then kyo gets to be in love and will be happy :)
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:icon102obsessions:
102obsessions Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2008
yeah lolz if only *sigh*
yeah
true at leats he'll be happy and thats wat i want 4 him :)
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:icondisturbedchicken:
disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Student Digital Artist
yeah ^^ i always feel soooo sorry for him so i want him to be soo happy :D
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102obsessions Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008
i know but if he was real he'd be my guy u do know that right? cuz i would accept him for him and everything he is
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008  Student Digital Artist
yep ^^ he'd definately be loved :)
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Cornigan Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2008
This poem makes me feel sad, and it inspires me to draw what I wanted to draw for a while, so I guess I better go get my art set.....

Really great poem, I now will try ro critique it because it is encouraged:
Hmmm... It's good but I think that the first paragraph,
you could make the first two lines one sentence maybe and the last three lines of the first paragraph could be put in one sentence like,
"That Chaos inside resides,

still forming in your brain."
Just to help it flow. The third and fourth row on the second paragraph don't exactly make sense where they are even though they are great lines. Maybe you could move them? The fifth line probably should have a comma at the end. Lines 14 and 15 in the poem are a bit confusing in their wording compared to what you just said. "besides you though..." is what throws me off.Maybe...

"...admist these tormenting days.
You're assuming she loves him more,
but is that the feeling that brings you to the floor?"

Line 28 needs to end with a question mark though you probably know that and thefirst letter of the next line needs to be capitilized.

The rest of it is fantastic. I don't mean to sound mean, but I wanted to help you by critiqueing you, and I need help for school becuase I need help critiqueing things for class. Great poem, I DO like it, and I also like Kyo. (Sorry for my comment's length!)
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Cornigan Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2008
You don't have to change anything, sorry. Now I feel bad!
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Nobody Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008
oh no it's fine ! ^^ i'm grateful for criticism - plus this is a really old poem lol i think i probably should change it a little - thanks ^^
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kyolovestohru Featured By Owner May 30, 2008
this is so pretty, and true!
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner May 31, 2008  Student Digital Artist
Thank you! ^^ i wrote this such a long time ago - i've improved since, hmmm maybe i should write a new one?
especially now i have new knowledge of Kyo lol - I wanna write one about him and Tohru :heart:
you've got me wanting to write now lol
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FruitsBasketFanM Featured By Owner May 13, 2008
It may be random, but it's great!!!! Kyo rules, he's funny.
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner May 14, 2008  Student Digital Artist
i LOVE him lol
soooooo cute with him and tohru :heart:
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FruitsBasketFanM Featured By Owner May 19, 2008
i know!
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner May 21, 2008  Student Digital Artist
they get together :heart: yay!!
sorry lol partly guessing partly spoilers lol
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FruitsBasketFanM Featured By Owner May 21, 2008
aww... man! spoiler! JK! ( just kiddin!)
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner May 23, 2008  Student Digital Artist
well it was based on a picture i saw of them kissing lol i havent read that far yet
i'm as far as book 17 ^^
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FruitsBasketFanM Featured By Owner May 23, 2008
im on like, - - - - - - - - ummm, 16
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Student Digital Artist
:D yay i'm not spoiling too much then lol i kinda like spoilers a lot so people get pissed off when i say something i know that they dont (cause they havent read that far)
the secret from mmmm book 16 (the one about akito) i knew since book 7 lol

im getting my friends into FB which is great lol but they're fighting over who gets the books first lol XD
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Drageneta Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
nice fan fiction ^_^
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner May 2, 2008  Student Digital Artist
thanks ^^ wrote this ages ago lol
glad you like it ^^
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Ariesbaby Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2008  Professional Artisan Crafter
mesa loves kyo and loves this too xD great job!!
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2008  Student Digital Artist
kyo is the bestest! ^^
thank you :hug:
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Ariesbaby Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2008  Professional Artisan Crafter
Yesh!! Yesh he is ......-hugs back- xD
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2008  Student Digital Artist
i hope he gets tohru!! :heart:
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:iconariesbaby:
Ariesbaby Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2008  Professional Artisan Crafter
SAME!!! I love the two of them!!!
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:icondisturbedchicken:
disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2008  Student Digital Artist
its sooooo cute when he goes all shy about it but she's so dense lol she doesnt even realise that what she's feeling is love, but its clear she does love him lol
im on book 16 - cant wait for more!!!
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Ariesbaby Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2008  Professional Artisan Crafter
Ya i know !! There so cute!! ..... I am only on book 4 ... i am a little broke right now so eventually i will be able to get them xD..... I love shigure too ..... i roleplay him on a friends fourm xD
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waterhorse95 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2008   Writer
nice
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:iconwaterhorse95:
waterhorse95 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2008   Writer
ur welcomeness!!
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2008  Student Digital Artist
lol thanks ^^
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rachelxena7 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2007   Writer
You're quite the poet. I was nearly brought to tears with that.
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2007  Student Digital Artist
i seriously don't understand why everyone loves this poem lol it was soooo long ago :D
but thank you so much ^^ i'm glad that my poems can actually have any effect on people at all ^^ i just love kyo and i feel so sorry for him i had to write about how he must be feeling :)
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Sasuaa Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2007  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love the poem thing first I thought it was a song . >< Sooo Kawii :+fav:
Poor Kyo*gives him a hug*(he turns into a Cat) ^^" :sorry Kyo-Kun"
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disturbedchicken Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2007  Student Digital Artist
hmm... it could be a song lol i write them to go to a certain rhythm ^^
thankies ^^ :hug: kyo is the best :heart: and i hope he gets tohru or i shall have some veeeeery angry letters to write to miss takaya... :D
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Sasuaa Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2007  Hobbyist Digital Artist
^_^ yea I was happy when I saw the (or one) of the last chapters It was sooo cute!!!your very welcome:hug:
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